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we're traveling
    at the speed of light
and we won't stop for nothing
           (there are no br(e)akes
           in this vehicle called life)

so let's keep going until we can
     reach the far edges of the universe
     where the blackness seeps into your skin and
     you passed the last star a couple thousand
                                          light years ago;

and return home to each other as
    old folks who've aged nothing but
       gained knowledge of all the
            mousetraps of the cosmos

        (don't ever ask me what they
         are -  a magician never reveals
         his secrets)
thank you all for the lovely comments and faves :heart:
and of course, to ~ReapersBride and ^thorns

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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-06-27
c by ~HillsOfMyst ( Suggested by rose-from-the-ashes and Featured by thorns )
:iconinvader-zim42:
invader-zim42 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
I think the title fits the poem the way it is now. Science FTW.
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha, agreed. thanks for the fave :heart:
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:iconinvader-zim42:
invader-zim42 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
No prob :)
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:iconinsistupon:
InsistUpon Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
Beautiful
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :3
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:iconvictorycoffee:
VictoryCoffee Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student Writer
how is this a daily deviation?
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:iconconcora:
Concora Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012   Writer
Well, that's rather rude.
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:iconvictorycoffee:
VictoryCoffee Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Student Writer
sorry, but this is a total phone-in. it's not BAD, it's just completely unremarkable, like porridge. HillsOfMyst has better works on his page and his work in general suffers from a reliance on lyrical wells that pop music had already sucked dry by the mid-80s.
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:iconnot-afraid:
Not-Afraid Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012
Awesome dude. Keep it up! May watch you, off to look through your gallery!
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, i will :]
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:icontelelia:
Telelia Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I keep wanting to try and sing this
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i don't find it very lyrical myself, but hey, if you ever find a melody to go with it, i'd love to hear it! :]
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:iconiammaddiiee:
Iammaddiiee Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love space, I love anything to do with space, and most of all, I love poetry about space. Favorited!
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! i like space too :3
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:iconiammaddiiee:
Iammaddiiee Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
NP! :3
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:icontsubamego:
TsubameGo Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Extremely beautiful, as for 186,000, definitely!!
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! i think i'm going to keep it how it is, though :]
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:iconsolaric:
solaric Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Professional Writer
your interesting poem structure and use of punctuation reminds me a bit of e.e.cummings - and that's a compliment, because I love his poetry.

The actual voice of the poem is very individual though - I love imagery in poetry that is connected with space, so this poem really appeals to me.
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it certainly is, i love his poetry too (he's basically my idol) so thank you so much!
i'm glad you liked it :]
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:iconacousticvibe132:
AcousticVibe132 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is absolutely beautiful :heart: Lovely
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :]
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:iconsowhataboutme:
sowhataboutme Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student Writer
love the poem, its very pretty
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :aww:
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:iconsowhataboutme:
sowhataboutme Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Student Writer
:iconawwplz: np!
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012
E equals m c squared.
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:iconevranawolfsong:
EvranaWolfsong Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I love the way you've structured this, how it adds to the nature of the poem and its unusualness. Nicely done!
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! :]
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:iconevranawolfsong:
EvranaWolfsong Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Of course X{D
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:iconflare-goes-om:
flare-goes-OM Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
nice :silentkitty:
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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:iconflare-goes-om:
flare-goes-OM Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
your welcome
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MissLunaRose Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012   General Artist
This is masterfully done! I love the imagery.

I think the title works. :aww: It's a little nuance for those familiar with science, just like the "not aging" part, and it adds a lot to the mood of your poem.

Your poem is really beautiful. Congratulations on your Daily Deviation! :love:
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i suppose using the number would be less obvious, as i'm pretty certain c only stands for the speed of light.

thanks :heart:
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:iconveronica1600:
Veronica1600 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautiful. simply beautiful
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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:iconveronica1600:
Veronica1600 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Student General Artist
but of course
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:icongejda:
Gejda Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012   Digital Artist
Amazing. I love how many image's you've created with this, the second verse is definitely my favourite, I love "the mousetraps of cosmos", too. Beautiful!
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
personally i am most proud of the third :] thank you!
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:icongejda:
Gejda Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012   Digital Artist
You're welcome :hug:
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:icongejda:
Gejda Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012   Digital Artist
*images
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SatoshiII Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ooooh this one is very interesting. I love the cosmic imagery involved.
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks:)
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:iconwhitty-boo:
whitty-boo Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I love this, very cute and well put together! Congratz
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ToaAkatsuki Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful. (No, you shouldn't change it to 186,000 because that's in miles and we use the metric system here, ja?) This makes me happy.

Congrats on the DD! :)

(See, you made me log in...)
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well, i couldn't use 2.998 x 10^8, that's not very poetic!

thanks :heart:
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:icontoaakatsuki:
ToaAkatsuki Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
and 186,000 is? D:

:)
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
er.. somewhat more poetic than exponents:D
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:icontoaakatsuki:
ToaAkatsuki Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
pfft.
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josecarlosbd Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
very,very good!:D
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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